This is a video I Directed + Edited for the Brooklyn band Object from their forthcoming debut album. The budget was low, but we tried to use that to our advantage. Any feedback would be great.

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Great cinematography. Didn't look low budget at all.

The performance sections were fine, but straight-ahead performance scenes really live or die on the charisma and talent of the band, and this isn't really my kind of music, so it's hard for me to judge. They didn't do much for me, but, again, it's not my kind of music.

The story segments ended up being cool; when I got to the end and realized where you were going with them, I liked them a lot in hindsight. The tumbling-down-the-stairs thing is cool and a big surprise. But to be honest, I almost turned off the video before I got there.

There are, I think, two problems.

FIrst, the video feels like it's 90% performance segment and only 10% story segment. This makes it hard for the story segment to build any momentum; every time I started to get interest in it, you'd cut back to the performance for a while.

Second, for a long while, it looks like the story segment is going to be a standard band-member-wakes-up-and-brushes-his-teeth thing. The first moment where I really sat up and thought, "Hey, there's something interesting going on here" is when he sees the broken eggs in the bathtub, and that doesn't come until about a third of the way into the video.

So, if you have the footage to do so, you might want to think about (a) weighting it more heavily towards the story stuff, and (b) moving the shot of the eggs (or some other indication that there's more than meets the eye) earlier on.

As always, that's just my opinion; your mileage may vary.

Hey, Jacob. I appreciate the feedback. Glad you got the story by the end. I was worried we were being too subtle (which from your comments it sounds like we did have problems there). We don't have too much more story footage, so it would be hard to add much more weight there, but your idea of tipping our hand a bit earlier is a good one. I realize not everyone is going to be into the music/performance etc. The "turn-off" factor is a concern, but I kind of wanted people to not be expecting anything really, and then be more surprised by the end. I guess whether that works is really in the eye of the beholder.

i second j on all of the above (even tho the edit was already well tight).